Need feedback on short animation storyboard

Hi! I have a 6-7 pages storyboard that needs feeback and improvement. The storyboard is for a short animation film lasting around 3 minutes. Will be made in simple 2D drawing style. I'm looking for someone who knows animation and who is good at storytelling/storybuilding. I want feedback on the character and the story structure, along with suggestions for improvement. Is the story understandable? Does it make its point? Is it humourous? Is it original enough or suggestions for improvement? Is it suitable for grown-ups as well as children? Is the choice of animation/movements/expressions (according to the storyboard) good enough? This is a one payment project. Please respond to this project only if you feel qualified and love working with animation and story structure. Thank you for reading through! :-)