Improve a 4 sentence pitch
- État: Closed
- Prix: $10
- Propositions reçues: 3
- Gagnant: petermainah
Résumé du concours
I need someone to improve the pitch I have written using the Napkin Business Canvas framework. The details about this canvas can be found here: https://hackernoon.com/the-napkin-business-canvas-9b019550ae3.
I have it written completely, 11 lines long (short)
I would like to:
- Make it sound more impactful
- Add an emotional aspect to it as well (if possible)
- Make it concise
- Reframe / Improve the sentences.
I will use it to do a 40-50 second voice over recording. So it needs to be within that time frame. The pitch is basically just describing a product and what it does.
I have added the necessary things you will need about the section "who want to" and "to" in the paragraph below in the same file. And these are the two main sections that need more attention.
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